Dreams & Memories.

Those times, when you enter in my dreams

Looking ever so young, lively and whole,

The picture of you that I had, is floating around, somewhere in the realms..

Looking through your eyes into mine, you were, with your lovely and watchful soul.

Felt as though I have found you again

As if you have returned; or rather, it was me….

For all I know, I left you alone in vain,

It should have been ‘we’, instead of just ‘me’..

The love in your eyes spoke an ineffable language,

That indicated a desire to be reunited back,

But how shall I go against the forces of nature;

And bring you back from the angels of Heaven?

– Suri

Note: This is my second attempt at poetry. I’ve written this as a dedication to my dog Sweety, who is no more with me. Please share your views regarding this and let me know how to improve my poetry skills. Thank you for reading. *wink*


40 thoughts on “Dreams & Memories.

  1. Second ATTEMPT? Wow you are seriously good! πŸ˜€ I think I wrote the words
    “A donkey lay in hay
    As he pray(s)” in my early attempts. πŸ˜‰
    Poetry and I err..don’t mix quite well.

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  2. This is really amazing and you don’t need any improvements! Your poetry should be directly from your Heart and not what others say..
    Why what happened to your Dog!?

    Best of luck!!
    Keep Writing! πŸ™‚
    Keep Smiling! :))

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  3. Write from your heart and you will be fine. The only person that really needs to be happy with your poetry is you!

    “Problem poetry” (from my perspective) comes from somebody who is trying too hard. They start using descriptive terms that are really “unusual”, or use multiple adjectives that are not in synch with the context. (“The sky was a ravenous and intellectually stimulating shade of desensitized blue.”).

    Some poets write with the desire to allow for interpretation. While an interesting concept, I find it sad when the message within the poem is not clear. I prefer to write so that what is on my mind at that time, is transferred to the reader’s mind, which means I must either introduce the poem to “set the scene”, or the text must be very clear with the intended meaning. Some poets, I am convinced, write from their heart, and then proceed to disguise it such that a reader has no concept of the poet’s feelings. They are in effect hiding behind their poetry.

    Having said all that, poetry (like any art form) should really have no boundaries. I write in the hope that the reader can relate in some way by either understanding the emotions expressed or, better still, feeling the emotions expressed. That makes me happy! πŸ™‚

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    1. “Some poets, I am convinced, write from their heart, and then proceed to disguise it such that a reader has no concept of the poet’s feelings.”
      – I think I’m one of those people.. πŸ˜›

      Thank you so much for this piece of information. πŸ™‚

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  4. Wow, this is very lovely. Thank you for sharing. I’m trying to learn about poems. Should have paid attention in class long ago. Perhaps it’s like the old adage that suggests that when the student is ready the teacher will be there. Too bad the student wasn’t interested long time ago.

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      1. I was kind of thinking about a human. Those lines developed a picture in my mind, and suddenly I realised it was a dog reading your postscript. Hence, the mental picture had to change and it was kind of nice! You have done a great job though! πŸ˜€

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